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안녕하십니까. 이안쌤. (제너럴)실전기출 Writing 단과문제에 5번째 타입. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve the problems? 관해서 수업을들었습니다.
그래서 이 관련된 문제 나오면 아래 탬플릿을 썻는데요.

-서론
It is undoubtedly(=certainly/true) the case that ____________.
There are several reasons for this problem,
and various measures could be taken by
governments (and individuals/parents/schools) to improve
the situation.

-본론1
There are two main factors that have led to
____________. One of the major causes is
that _____________________. The second
reason is that ______________________.

-본론2
There are several actions that governments
could take to solve the problems described
above. Firstly, a simple solution would be to
_____________. The second measure would be
for governments to ___________. A successful
example of this is(=For example,) _______________________.

-결론
In conclusion, despite some obvious reasons,
various measures can be taken to tackle the
problem of _____________.

emd 첨삭서비스풀고 있는데요.
pattern 4 What are the causes(Reasons; Effects) of the problem and solutions?
Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? (from Cambridge 4)
문제였습니다.

이 경우, 제가 저 템플릿을 그대로 쓰니깐, 잘못되었다는 첨삭 리뷰를 받았습니다. 이건 문제의 원인과 해결책이 아니라, 행복의 정의가 어려운 이유와 어떻게 행복을 찾을수 있나 묻는 문제인데요. 문제에 따라서 조금씩 바꿔야하긴하데, 저런 경우는 제가 어떻게 하면 될까요.